Also had nice illustrations which is not always customary in a free Kindle ebook. Overall I still think A neat book about how a child's imagination can be beautifully nurtured by attentive grown-ups. All that whip cracking against the animals did not sit too well with me, especially as there could have been a multitude of cool, alternative scenarios that avoided violence or captive animals. Wish the main daydream that the story focuses on was not about the little boy, Kevin, being a lion tamer. There is promise - it just needs a little tweaking.Ī neat book about how a child's imagination can be beautifully nurtured by attentive grown-ups. I don't intend this to be discouraging or overtly critical Martin Tiller. If you want them to learn to write well, they need good writing to read. If you write a children's book, in a sense it is even more important that spelling and grammar is spot on than in an adult book. And, ok, I went to a private school so there may have been stricter standards. I would never have been allowed to get away with this, not even in the 3rd grade (which Kevin is in). "Write down the whole daydream I want to see what happens." A semicolon, or a comma, or perhaps a dash would be nice.Īnd so on. "Kevin, thank you for giving me your attention, how many baseballs does a team have if three boys bring three baseballs each?" - This is not just one sentence. "His heart raced, but it just isn't the same." - I'd say this should be "just wasn't the same". It wasn't terrible, but there were some grammatical issues: The text, however, could use a little work. The illustrations are really very good and have been well-converted into ebook format.
Unfortunately it's not quite without its flaws. oops!) and someone who loves to both read and write, I wholeheartedly approve of this little story about a boy whose teacher encourages him to channel his daydreaming into writing. It wasn't terrible, but there were some gramĪs a former daydreamer in class (and now a daydreamer at work, on the bus, walking home.
As a former daydreamer in class (and now a daydreamer at work, on the bus, walking home.
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